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Thanks Clau, for a thoughtful comment despite your inclination to more rhyme-centric poetry. ^_^ I loved the use of days and grays. (unless you are speaking of a The Greys, ...

Oy, thanks Myth! If I've got two Myth-critiques in a day, I'm sure it makes it a good one. ^_^ I don’t think ‘the’ is necessary there. I know this ...

Myth - thanks so much; really - you're divinely helpful. ^_^ ...And with this critique (and the others I've gotten) I've got to stop delaying my rewrite/revision. !_! You often ...

Thanks Wiggy - sharp suggestion on the rhythm...'and' and 'voice's' - you've got a point. ^_^ What does sans mean? I've never heard that word before! Sans - the French ...

Yes, I was going to ask about the translation. I know I couldn't wade through it in Polish - the spelling in the Roman alphabet, oy, drives my mind sideways. ...

Hey Tri. I did promise this weeks ago - and it's been caught, nettling, at the back of mind since then. ^_^'' I'm not going to go line by line; ...

Thanks, almost inexpressibly, to all of you. ^_^ Vetren'iy has been maddening, what with Tov and most everything else...and I rather thought it wasn't coming out into anything worth reading. ...

Hello again, Gyr. ^_^ ( over the re-draft ) DD has hit the most points on Mattira, even in the redraft. But to reiterate from a different perspective - it ...

Moved then. ^_^

Mila was in her corner, sunk down against the floor. She hid her face in her arms, terrified now by something that her sister could not see, and dared a ...

To continue what I began... ^_^ Sergeant Janus sat alone in the dark corner, mindlessly watching the other soldiers devour their meals. The village hall was filled with the echo ...

Oy... !_! Unbroken now, at least. ^_^ I hope it's helpful.

Ele makes a pertinent point. Moved .

Tarin's about thirteen or so... young enough to be young and considered a child, perhaps, and old enough to be lucid. But little kids are surprisingly smart. I wouldn't hold ...

Hello again Jearjoe. The beginning is much more involving; you've managed to weave Martico's feelings, character in so that the events have some connection to us and to him. If ...